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Pikazec2012:
post all feedback for my story here
the other thread is locked so i can keep it from getting spammed and keep all the story in one place.
i have permission from richie to do this so mods plz dont lock or merge this topic.
if you dont know what digimon im talking about through any part of the story use http://digimon.wikia.com/wiki/Digimon_Wiki
plz tell me what chapter you are reviewing as well
and dont just say it sucked plz tell me why it sucked and what parts i can fix on. THANKS!!!

Kuwabara:
:o Dude,that was epic! I didn't know you could write so well!

ChexCommander:
"The next day Teko sits in the holding room outside the battlefield..."

This is in present tense. The rest of the chapter is in past tense. Why is this? You should not be changing tenses midway through a paragraph, especially only for one sentence. Maybe it was just a typo on your part, but it's just info for future reference. ;)

Pikazec2012:
@ Kuwabara: Thanks!
@CC: HOW DID I MISS THAT!! i will fix that for next realease

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